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The Black Angel

Last post 09-22-2009, 11:11 AM by madness43. 2 replies.
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  •  07-13-2009, 6:10 PM 2947408

    The Black Angel

    Many people had thought Kristell and Elleha were traitors for deserting the Formors. they weren't the only ones. The Organization, comprised of a champion from each race of Formors, lead their respective races. But there where two Formors that turned against them. Their names were Alastor and Ragnal. Ragnal was a powerful Formor with long spiky white hair, red eyes, and weird blue tattoos on his body. He was to become the leader of the Organization but during battle he was injured and nursed to health by a human healer. Ragnal saw the kindness humans had despite the healer knowing he was a Formor. Ragnal soon turned against his kind and left the Organization and disappeared from existence.

    Alastor was the son of the champion of the Fallen Angels, a race of Formors with white wings and fought with swords. Alastor had two brothers. His oldest brother Midir, who had white hair that hung in drapes and red eyes, and Merlin, their little brother who had blue spiky hair and brown eyes with white wings like his brothers. Alastor and Merlin were loved by their mother, but their father, Arawn, prefered Midir over them. One day during a battle with humans, Merlin was captured and Alastor tried to rescue him, but got an arrow embedded in his leg. One of the humans then sliced his wings off. the other angels came to rescue him but Arawn told them to leave him to die. Alastor tried to stop his father, but he only impaled him, killing him.

    Alastor was supposed to have been killed, but the Goddess Morrighan, who had seen what happened, had saved him and healed his wounds, giving him black wings as the result. Alastor swore vengence against his father and the Formors but had to save his mother. unfortunately he arrived to find his mother dead by his father's hands. Alastor, in a rage, tried to attack Arawn, but failed and retreated. No one saw him again. Years later, he returned during the Second War with the Formors and this time, fought his father. He was about to kill him but Midir ended Alastor's life in the breif moments that occured for Alastor to kill his father. Alastor died that day. Midir, now the champion after his father's retirement, senses Alastor's presense and now is trying to find him. But could Alastor be alive? Or is there something else going on?


    Name: Shaosu
    Race: Human
    Guild: Lancia
    Server: Mari
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    Name: Velran
    Race: Elf
    Server: Mari
  •  07-15-2009, 6:20 PM 2958977 in reply to 2947408

    Re: The Black Angel

    This is a fanfiction for Mabinogi i'm writing, well the sequel to my first one, here's the Prologue:

    Prologue

    In a dark dungeon, an old man with grey hair was walking down a corridor. The old man may have been old, but despite the wrinkles and his grey hair, he looked to have a few more years of youth in him. The reason why he was here was he heard a rumor from an adventurer who went down this dungeon, he heard the sound of an infant crying, but when he tried to find the sound, there was no one there.

     

    Now, most of the villagers wouldn’t go to the dungeon, but Duncan decided to go. As he traveled the dungeon he could hear the sound of a baby crying. He ran faster and the crying got louder, when he found the room where he heard the crying, he was surprised to find someone there. In a small basket, covered in some cloth, was a lone infant baby. The baby had black hair and a sleeping expression on his face.

     

    Duncan carefully took the baby in his arms, and saw it was a boy. “My, my…you look to be a fine young lad” Duncan whispered to the baby. That’s when he noticed something; he folded the baby’s head back and saw the shape of a two-sided triangle with a dot above it, the symbol of the Formors. Duncan knew that this child was a Formor…but it didn’t look evil, it looked…nice, and innocent.

     

    Duncan took out a quill and looked for a piece of paper. He found one and a bottle of ink too. He dipped the quill in ink and wrote on the paper, he finished and looked at what he wrote:

    To whoever may find this, I recently came across a child here, don’t worry, he will be fine, I am taking him to my village of Tir Choniall to raise him. I know he is half-Formor, but I shall raise him to help him understand humans. Don’t worry, he shall be fine

    Duncan

    Duncan placed his note on the baby’s crib and held the child in his arms. He exited out of the dungeon, remembering it was dark outside, but luckily the moon gate lead to the village, so he used the dungeon’s moon gate and found himself just outside of the village. Some of the dogs and sheep noticed Duncan with the baby and walked towards them.

    The dogs sniffed the baby, causing him to giggle. Duncan smiled as he took the baby past the square, making sure no one saw him, before returning to his house.

    Inside Ciar Dungeon, a lone man stepped out of the shadows, he noticed the baby’s crib was empty but had a note in it. He picked it up and read it. “So…looks like the humans decided to take him…I wonder how they’ll do with raising him…” the man said as a grin formed across his face, hidden by his hood.

    That's the prologue, i'll add the first chapter some other time
    Name: Shaosu
    Race: Human
    Guild: Lancia
    Server: Mari
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    Name: Velran
    Race: Elf
    Server: Mari
  •  09-22-2009, 11:11 AM 3306256 in reply to 2958977

    Re: The Black Angel

    Chapter 1: Taliesin

    In the village of Tir Choniall, a young boy was sitting underneath a tree just outside the village. He had black hair that parted in the middle, brown eyes, and was wearing a black beginner's long shirt with brown pants and leather shoes. He was also wearing a black bandana and carried a short sword on his hip. This boy's name was Taliesin, and he's been living in Tir Choniall for a few years ever since Duncan, the old Chief, had found him. Duncan had taken care of him over his years as chief, when Duncan named Shaosu, the hero of the last Formor War and a Goddess Knight, the new chief of Tir Choniall Taliesin was allowed to stay there with them.

    he also got along great with Gerald, Shaosu and Naomi (Nao)'s son. He was around 13 and was just like Taliesin. The two got a long great and would secretly do dungeon runs in Ciar and Ably dungeons, even though they were off-limits. Ever since the war ended some people got along with the Formors who betrayed Cichol, even going under the guise of humans. Life in Errin was peaceful. Taliesin got up, wiped off the dirt from his pants, and made his way to the school, which the class was dismissed.

    "Taliesin!" Gerald called to his friend and rushed towards him. "Hey Gerald, what's up?" Taliesin asked. "Nothing much, hey, wanna go explore Ciar again?" Gerald asked in a whisper. "You know those bandits are tough, plus ever since they showed up it's getting harder and harder to get out" Taliesin said. "wimp..." Gerald muttered. "I am not a wimp, we're going to Ciar" Taliesins aid. "Yay! I'll get ready, meet me by the Pasture" Gerald said and took off to his house. Taliesin muttered something about Gerald's optimism and made his way to fetch his things.

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    A few minutes later Taliesin was now wearing a black robe with a black Lute on his back. Gerald soon appeared wearing a light red robe and carried a set of Gladius, one gold and the other white. "Let's go" taliesin said and they made their way to Ciar Dungeon. After the Formors left the dungeon was mainly populated by bandits and rogues and not many stepped into the dungeons. Taliesin and Gerald made their way to the dungeon entrance and into the lobby. The walked up to the Goddess statue and Taliesin pilled our a green gem. He looked at gerald, who nodded, and dropped the gem.

    (That's it for now, more later)


    Name: Shaosu
    Race: Human
    Guild: Lancia
    Server: Mari
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    Name: Velran
    Race: Elf
    Server: Mari
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